A New Love Story (Villanelle)

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I don’t want to live my life in purgatory 
The time has come for me to move on 
I’m looking for a new love story

Our relationship is in dangerous territory 
Mistrust and insecurity have started to spawn, 
I don’t want to live my life in purgatory

Our life together is a sad inventory 
And now with the battle lines drawn 
I’m looking for a new love story

When love turns bitter, a change is mandatory 
Especially when the gentleness is gone, 
I don’t want to live my life in purgatory

I am being clear; I don’t speak in allegory 
I’m looking for someone I can depend on 
I’m looking for a new love story

My love was meant for higher glory 
Hope on the horizon is starting to dawn 
I don’t want to live my life in purgatory 
I’m looking for a new love story

I’m aware traditional poetry isn’t everyone’s cup of tea, so if you got this far… well done.

Villanelle: A poetry form with five tercets and an ending quatrain. There are 19 lines with a rhyming scheme of A1BA2 ABA1 ABA2 ABA1 ABA2 ABA1A2. The first line repeats as line 6, 12, and 18, and the third line repeats as line 9, 15, and 19. If you are new to poetry, the most famous Villanelle is Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night, by Dylan Thomas.

18 thoughts on “A New Love Story (Villanelle)”

  1. Well done Bree … I have written a few Villanelle’s, and I found the format quite difficult .. yours is a sensitive story, with a positive finale ..Here is Leonard Cohen’s glorious Villanelle

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  5. Very cool! It flows super well. I like this part: “I am being clear; I don’t speak in allegory. A dazzling ending as well. The best part about this format is everything has to connect seamlessly and you’ve done that! Fantastic as always!

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  6. This is so beautifully written, Bree…deep lines…it’s simply flowing & the replete, due this style makes it even more intense…your poem made me to connect with my story…you would “kill” it if you ever decide to do a spoken word 💟

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      1. Oh my…my intelligent keyboard Auto-INcorrected a few words…didn’t notice…wtf is “the replete, due this style” 🤦‍♂️😂…”the repetition due to this style”…I wanted to write…I’m sure you cracked the code anyway…you’re welcome btw…I love the intensity, depth & flow 💟

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