(Ballad of the Stars)

At first glance my soul loved yours
but our star-signs spelt disaster
I didn’t know we’d make it with
the universe as master
When I read our astrology
my mind fell into deep despair
you told me not to worry
you placed a kiss upon my hair
You said you’d shift the heavens
rewrite the pathways in the sky
you’d make our signs compatible
we wouldn’t have to say ‘goodbye’
So you called upon the gods
and spirits of the universe
to see if they would find new ways
for the stars to be disbursed
You convinced those gods to move
homes of the constellations
showing your great love for me
changed the milky way’s foundations
But some stars they did not like it
and refused to realign
saying, “Why should we have to move?
We detest this redesign”
Now they blaze across the sky
no longer in one location
those shooting stars rebelling
without a destination
For the stars who blessed our love
the spirits gave a brilliant light
now our birth-stars shine together
beaming brightly in the night
You rearranged the heavens
changing their course forever
influencing the gods and stars
so we could be together
At first glance my soul loved yours
but our star-signs spelt disaster
I didn’t know we’d make it till
you arranged our ‘ever after’
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Come Read this and listen to the audio too!!
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😊💕🌹
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A wondrously epic fantasy/love story, with a gorgeous fairytale ending … and I thoroughly enjoyed your Audio Bree ..
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Oh thank you Ivor, so glad to hear you liked it. Really means a lot 😊
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Your welcome Bree
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star quality poetry right here, beautiful
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🙂 Thank you Kizito
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It’s such a romantic poem! 😍
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Thanks Cassa, I had a clear story in mind for this one 💜
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star search! your love is in vain
as i have said a twixt lines
over and again
yet your voice
is a choice
lost in love
you to i
as the gallant
years go cavorting by
i must say an elegant and sexy post
to you and yours i raise my fist in a salutory toast!
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Thank you 🙂
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so lovely 💜 that audio rocks!
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💜 Thank you for being my beta listener 🙂
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Always a pleasure!
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Bree, you’re a star…this is absolutely a stellar writing…the rhyming…the depth…the spoken word is a killer…new dimension to something so beautiful & spatial…you’ve made it extra special…so expressive…can you see, I love everything about it? 💫🤍✨🌟
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I can see that you love it and I appreciate your heart and that it feels things deeply. Thank you Navin 💜 I have been working on this one for a while (a few months), so it’s lovely to hear it all came together well.
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You’re welcome Bree…oh wow, how nice…it all definitely came together very well ✨💟💫
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Oh this is very nice Bree. An interesting context. The first stanza and the last stanza are cleverly crafted 🙂
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Thanks Vignesh 🙂 It took a while for me to develop this one from a thought I had a while back, but I got there in the end 😅
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👏👏👏
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I’m always so excited to see you have a new poem available; and this poem here, is filled with so much love, the words drip with it. This here, “I didn’t know we’d make it with the universe as master” is wondrous, and the last stanza is brilliant. Reading and listening, profound, Bree. ❤️❤️
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Oh this is a truly lovely comment to read. I seem to have missed it somehow, but maybe I was meant to read it today 🙂
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I’m glad you found it. Exactly when you were supposed to. How fun that is. A lovely day/evening to you, Bree. ☺️
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I love the conceit of this: the all powerfuness of love, that feeling of omnipotence —
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Haha yes, I love that insight ‘conceit’, perfect descriptor 👌
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Oh wow! Better, better, best. Loving so many stanzas. Great story weaved in.
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Thanks Ben, I really enjoyed putting this ballad together 🙂
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Welcome! Your poetic range is immense. Impressed 🙂
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