At the edge of her tomorrow,
I am one step away
from being another
memory.
I start fading
into all the dreams
she chooses not to remember.
I start fading
from the midnight of her eyes
as she turns back to her sun.
I start fading
into the blackness of her pain,
forgotten
as the dawn light spills
back into her life.
I start fading
from the life we had together
living only in the unconscious thoughts
she buries.
I start fading
knowing
she was never mine to keep.
This is my first real attempt at writing from a male point of view and it happened by accident; the universe played a sneaky trick on me so to speak. 😁💜 I hope you enjoy this attempt.
Secret Thoughts Within 
It’s beautiful 💖💖🥺🥺🥺
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Oh thank you so much 😊💜 Phew 😅
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💜💜💜💜
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“At the edge of her tomorrow,
I am one step away
from being another
memory.”…those opening lines make a strong impact S 💙
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It was the universe speaking, I kid you not. So kind of you to say 💜
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Great attempt!!
I loved it, Secrets❤️
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Thank you Hema 💜💜💜
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Beautiful!
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Thank you Sir Knight ⚔️ I really appreciate your comment 🙂💜
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Well written ST, slowly fading away from their memory sounds quite painful. You have articulated it well, with the right emotions! 🙌
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Thanks Uzzawal, I really appreciate that. It’s rather encouraging to hear this poem captured the right emotions 💜
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Beautiful!
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Thank you Akshita 💕
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Loving it, how gentle yet dark this poem was.
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Thank you Jessica 😊
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This is so beautiful! Your writing is so tender and your talent continually blossoming. Thank you for always sharing your heart💗
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Thank you so much Katy. That is so very encouraging to hear 🙂
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This is a really clever stanza: “I start fading / from the midnight of her eyes / as she turns back to her sun.” The contrast of darkness and light and then how the night fades to the sun and vice versa. Loving what you did with this. And that’s awesome you tried a new perspective.
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Thanks Ben, I had been trying for a little while, but it just wasn’t working and then, this one came along. 🙂
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet and commented:
Romantic Poem
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Loved this!! You did super from a male viewpoint!! Is this going to open up a whole new horizon for you, Secrets???
i’m hoping??? LOL
xoxox
😘💕🌹😁
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Thanks Chuck, I actually struggled a lot to finally get this poem, so I’m uncertain how much I will do in the future 😬😅😆
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Actually, writing from your opposite gender viewpoint is easier than you think. I like to do it depending on the topic. It’s a little like playing chess when in the middle of the game they turn the board around and you have to play the opposite side of the board.. You should try it again??? Please?
xoxox 😊💖🌹
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Oh man… I’m not sure I can 😅 I’ll given it a go sometime though.
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Oh, come on, really? You struggle to switch viewpoints? I think you would be Really, Really good at it if you try it a few times? I will send you an offline an example inspired from a friend’s post. Let me know what you think, Dear Secrets?
xoxox 😘💕🌹😍
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Haha, I actually started writing one yesterday after your comment (I might send it to you when I’m done). So yes, please send yours to me Chuck 🙂
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The male view is fantabulous. Loved the way you weaved the words.
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Haha, thank you my lovely friend. I like trying something 👍
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Try everything 😉
Welcome 🙂
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